Waking Mar3 by Mark M. Redfearn waking at midnight to wind gusts, at dawn to her cough Related Post navigation ← Doll Ice → 17 comments on “Waking” Lolly says: March 3, 2013 at 3:51 pm I smile, smile, smile at your one liner. Love it! Reply JazzBumpa says: March 3, 2013 at 3:53 pm smoker? JzB Reply Mark M. Redfearn says: March 3, 2013 at 4:18 pm You wanna fill that one-liner out a little bit, sir? 🙂 Reply JazzBumpa says: March 3, 2013 at 4:59 pm A bit ambiguous? Ahem. Is she exhibiting a smoker’s cough? Cheers! JzB Reply Mark M. Redfearn says: March 3, 2013 at 5:08 pm Ambiguity? No, I just wanted more words from friend Jazzbumpa! Reply JazzBumpa says: March 3, 2013 at 5:14 pm Sometimes I suffer from terse curse. Cheers! JzB Reply WabiSabi says: March 3, 2013 at 7:06 pm Hilarious! Reply WabiSabi says: March 3, 2013 at 7:08 pm Not getting much sleep, are you? Reply Mark M. Redfearn says: March 4, 2013 at 2:09 am No, I’m not, but it really has nothing to do with anyone’s cough. Just thought it would make a good haiku. Reply siggiofmaine says: March 3, 2013 at 9:05 pm I’m confused at waking at midnight to a dawn cough… but whatever you say…? your wife’s name Dawn ? Sigh. It’s bedtime in Maine ! Peace, Siggi Reply Mark M. Redfearn says: March 4, 2013 at 2:10 am If there were a comma after “gusts,” would that help? Maybe I should put one there… Reply siggiofmaine says: March 4, 2013 at 4:38 am Oh, woke up twice ! I should have figured it out…If I’m the only confused person, don’t change it… I’m really dense sometimes. I do like it very much now that I understand… Thank you for clearing my thinking up ! Peace, Siggi Reply Meenakshi Malhotra says: March 4, 2013 at 8:39 am That’s a very different take on prompt. I remember my grandpa’s cough at midnight. Reply Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says: March 4, 2013 at 12:41 pm Clearly a different take on the prompt. I think its the fadoista making a return 🙂 Reply Write Girl says: March 4, 2013 at 4:09 pm What a terrific metaphor. Beautifully done. Reply kz says: March 4, 2013 at 4:12 pm makes sleep impossible! great haiku 🙂 Reply Chèvrefeuille says: March 5, 2013 at 4:03 am Good one line haiku Mark. Love to see that you are trying this one-line haiku … our classical haiku poets did wrote their haiku in the same way often. Reply Leave a Reply Cancel reply Enter your comment here... Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Email (required) (Address never made public) Name (required) Website You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Google account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Twitter account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Facebook account. ( Log Out / Change ) Cancel Connecting to %s Notify me of new comments via email. Notify me of new posts via email. This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.