a broken window
dusk creeps into the bedroom
old dog growls and snaps


13 comments on “Dusk

  1. Excellent – the two actions relating

  2. Cathy Tenzo says:

    Love the dusk slowly seeping in….I had a similar thought.

  3. ohhh I like the dark edge of that – the dog knows there’s something in it.

  4. hannadeane says:

    ‘creeps’ makes Dusk into a person, whereas ‘seeps’ would have left it merely an entity or substance.

  5. J says:

    Very nicely done

  6. julespaige says:

    Old dogs like old people do not like change!

  7. menons129 says:

    awesome composition.

  8. Very nicely written haiku Mark … I like the idea of crawling inside of sunlight.

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