in the ceaseless sound
of wind sweeping the prairie
a terrified mouse
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Sweeping
in the ceaseless sound
of wind sweeping the prairie
a terrified mouse
Mark M. Redfearn 
nice juxtaposition Mark, luv it
much love…
very nice and poor little mouse
This is such a stellar response Mark.. That little mouse create just the right sharpness.
This is great – I can really hear that powerful wind but I do feel for the poor mouse!
Awesome response! Poor sleekit tim’rous cowerin’ thing!
Echoes of Bobby Burns in your speech! 😉
On Tue, Mar 24, 2015 at 7:03 PM, Mark M. Redfearn wrote:
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I really like this one!
I love that juxtaposition Mark … an awesome haiku with a wonderful scene so natural.
Not only the juxtaposition but the image is so vivid we want to scream “hide” to the wee mouse:)
As if we ourselves were the mouse!
On Wed, Mar 25, 2015 at 8:15 AM, Mark M. Redfearn wrote:
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Well if it’s Kansas!!!
The wind sweeps across the desert too, and sometimes I just wish it would stop!
Magical Key
In Iowa, I think mice are accustomed to wind but terrified by sound of tractors pulling balers!