Renunciation Apr19 by Mark M. Redfearn from the rose’s musk to the rust on the door hinge letting all things go Advertisements Related Post navigation ← Holy Drought → 8 comments on “Renunciation” Greg says: April 19, 2015 at 7:02 pm I really like the imagery you used. Reply Jen says: April 19, 2015 at 8:09 pm Another haiku that stops me dead in my tracks — great symbolism 🙂 Reply Bastet says: April 19, 2015 at 10:09 pm Yes! Perfectly said! Reply Edward Beach says: April 20, 2015 at 1:13 am Hi Mark. I really like your haiku. Here, the rusting hinge is a fitting objective correlative to the idea of letting things go, whilst the rose musk softens the haiku by adding a subtle wistfulness to the narrator’s voice. The three components of your haiku not only cohere but also complement each other: the haiku feels naturally composed rather than a jumbled composite of nature imagery and emotion. Have you ever considered submitting haiku to The Heron’s Nest or A Hundred Gourds? They are two online haiku magazines. I’m sure the editors would be happy to publish you. Reply Edward Beach says: April 20, 2015 at 1:17 am I only just realised this is written in old-school 5-7-5 too. I’ve honestly not read a 5-7-5 that reads so smoothly for a good while. Reply janicead says: April 20, 2015 at 12:03 pm Letting go seems the hardest thing to do at times. Reply Suzanne says: April 21, 2015 at 12:42 am I laughed in delight at this one. Beautiful and profound. Reply adaspoetryalcove says: April 21, 2015 at 8:37 pm nicely done! I was actually thinking about flaking rust but didn’t get any farther, Reply Leave a Reply Cancel reply Enter your comment here... Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Email (required) (Address never made public) Name (required) Website You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Twitter account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Facebook account. ( Log Out / Change ) You are commenting using your Google+ account. ( Log Out / Change ) Cancel Connecting to %s Notify me of new comments via email. Notify me of new posts via email.